I love writing Haiku for the simple reason that it does not need rhyming, it is usually inspired by nature and written from the heart without being philosophical. I think it was just last year that I started learning how to write it after its introduction by deerparkthimphu. I know it'll take me ages to get near perfect at it but definitely not without practice, right?
Below please find my Haiku contribution to Deerparkthimphu for February 2010 - hoping they'll appear on the site soon...well, doesn't matter really even if they don't.
Below please find my Haiku contribution to Deerparkthimphu for February 2010 - hoping they'll appear on the site soon...well, doesn't matter really even if they don't.
Covered in black
She gazed at the crow on the roof
Snow sparklingly white
Paper strewn
Head hidden in shame
Bird chirping
The bald path
Dry leaves on either side
Sea way beyond
Crazy winds
Dry leaves turned wild
Pole still
Red faced
He shouted in anger
Rosary clenched
Child sobbing
Under the bare tree
Wind singing
A baldy stood stock-still, arms akimbo, contemplating converting into Sikhism
ReplyDeleteDroppings from the crow above splashed onto his bare scalp
Caught unawares, he shouts "Lam Kencho Sum Kheno" and slips in
The crow flies off, shooed away by the sound of the droppings backfiring!!!
Good attempt, Dawa! Keep at it, at least for the sake of doing something different from the usual. ha ha
ReplyDeleteI hope my attempt hasn't misfired! What's the "usual"?
ReplyDeleteI assumed you work in front of the computer at the office nine to five, with some time off for an extended lunch and teas and articles for your blog or the local newspaper etc etc etc, but NOT haiku writing...
ReplyDeleteYes, you are right. It's like this: I've no flair for haiku. It's nothing to do with Japan or Japanese; in fact, I've a passion for geisha!
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ReplyDeleteHi there,
ReplyDeleteSo you don't follow that pattern of 5, 7, 5 syllables. I don't suppose there is a formal pattern that one needs sticking to.
Here's my attempt at it, made way back in 2001 as an undergrad (these are the only two, I never tried again).
Your "haiku" post prompted me to go on a rummaging-spree. And after almost an hr, I succeded in fishing them out of my rather musty paper pile. I had written it in its conventional 5-7-5 format.
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No easy reprieve
Hath this overriding grief
Of you 'am bereft!
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An idyllic realm
Of peerless grandeur that is-
Live on! my birth land
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Wow! So we do have haiku writers. Thanks, Lakey. Wouldn’t it be wonderful if a group (me excluded) got together and read out haikus turn wise or played haiku in a competitive spirit like antaakshri in singing. Just imagining...
ReplyDeleteDawa, I watched the movie ‘Memoirs of a Geisha’ and I think I can understand why you would have a passion for geisha. I myself was almost wishing I had been one in my youthful days – ha ha. I like their gracefulness in particular. What about you?
Ha ha...Do not know about haiku antaakshri(s), but being a bit of a Hindi film song buff, I could be game for antaakshri. However, you can safely count Dawa out. Though we are of the same stock, it would surprise me if he could mouth a line in Hindi, let alone sing it!!:)
ReplyDeleteAum Tshering,
ReplyDeleteYou like their gracefulness? I like nothing in particular but them in everything!
Bro Lakey,
Counting me out may be inadvisable, for I'm a treasure trove of so many thought-provoking Hindi one-liners; in fact, a string of expletives!
So, Lakey, I discovered today (after a long exchange of views with Dawa actually) that you and I have two things in common - that, we like trying our hand at haiku writing; and we are fond of hindi songs. I used to be an expert at writing hindi songs from listening to the radio when I was a little girl. I had two thick books of handwritten hindi songs and you might not believe me if I told you 'who' I had to witness burning them in the year 1988. I cried and cried and cried...Long time ago, huh!
ReplyDeleteKhushboo hung mai
Phool nahi
Joh murjaunga...
This old song of Shaan's father (S.K. Mukherjee) was sung so well by Shaan recently at the Maha Muqabla singing contest on Star TV that's shown every Saturday and Sunday at 9:30 PM.
Khuda bhi
Aasmaanse
Jab zameenper dekhta hoga
"Mere meheboob ko kisne banaya?" sochta hoga...
Wa wa wa kya lyrics tha us zamaaneme....any woman could be mesmerized by such words of a man...
So, Dawa, you believe in 'package' huh!
ReplyDeleteIf truth is stranger than fiction, package is truly better than product at times. I do not believe, but it's striking and I'm struck. Not necessarily love-struck, though.
ReplyDeleteBy package, I meant 'everything in one' - e.g. not just the face but grace, figure, hair, toes, nails, moles, gestures, mannerisms, voice, etc etc etc
ReplyDeleteYes, everything including goosebumps!
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